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meadow comic 4by ~aryundomiel

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I think it still need a few changes... dialogs to be written correctly... part of a series of 8
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!ladydreamweaver Jan 17, 2009
I love edward's face in the "you would have followed me" panel. Fantastic job on all of these! I can't wait to see them all! :D :hug:
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~cattieloves Jan 14, 2009
Haha, when Bella said "no doubt" it made me laugh. It's like, "Eh, yeah, you're right, I would have died. Oh well." Ha. :D
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~aryundomiel Jan 15, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:)
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~HieiSetsunaShika Jan 14, 2009
In the bottom two pannels on the left, I think that either Bella or Edward needs to be reversed. The reason I say this is that it seems a little awkward to have two people who are across from each other side by side looking in the same direction. It almost seems as if they're both facing the same way, or that they're beside each other rather than across. Do you see what I'm trying to say? If they're facing opposite directions, you can maintain the fact that they are actually across from each other.
(sorry, that was a little long)

Other than that (and the dialogue breaks) I thought this page was great. It's clear that your improving, which is a very good thing :love:
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~aryundomiel Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i noticed that too...thanks for confirming my suspicions... anyawy i wasn't satisfied with ed face so I would change it anyway
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~HieiSetsunaShika Jan 14, 2009
The only thing wrong with edwards face seems to be the mouth. other than that the shading and everything is great.
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~aryundomiel Jan 15, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I 'll see what I can do...thanks
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~MagDa-LeNaa Jan 13, 2009
I love Edward's expression:heart: in the 'you would have followed' panel!
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~loveheals3 Jan 13, 2009
cool. These are really well done.
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~aryundomiel Jan 13, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
which hand?
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